Shackled
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Shackled
Shackled
I think it would be safe to say
From the moment of my conception
You had a different girl in mind
Your image of perfection.
You dolled me up in pink
And sent me off to play
Disappointed when I returned
Muddy and mussed from the fray.
For a reason unknown to this day
I’ve always been so shy
You saw in me potential
But never let me fly.
I am the worst kind of dreamer
The type that thinks too much
A romantic with an open mind
But you were not quite such.
I tried to be a clone
But it never felt quite right
Now I’ve broken free and stretched my wings
Forever finished with that test flight.
You assume it’s simply teenage angst
That the media controls my mind
You think I’m looking for myself
But it’s me you’ve got to find.
I know my purpose on this earth
My future is crystal clear
Yet my “radical” ideas
You simply refuse to hear.
I’ve grown up in a small-minded town
In a generation not so kind
But my morals have formed absolute
Ingrained in my mind.
You both were raised quite differently
And I must confess
I feel you’re pressing yourselves upon me
Hence, I’ve become a mess.
You say that you trust me
That you care for my happiness
But clearly by the way you chain me
You want only my success.
I try to show you what you’ve caused
I’ve slipped you subtle signs
But still these shackles slit my wrists;
Too tightly I am confined.
And so I’ve become a monster
It grows worse and worse each day
I fear you’ve caused my sanity
To eat itself away.
This is highly personal, written for my parents but never to reach their eyes. I thought I'd share it anyway.
I think it would be safe to say
From the moment of my conception
You had a different girl in mind
Your image of perfection.
You dolled me up in pink
And sent me off to play
Disappointed when I returned
Muddy and mussed from the fray.
For a reason unknown to this day
I’ve always been so shy
You saw in me potential
But never let me fly.
I am the worst kind of dreamer
The type that thinks too much
A romantic with an open mind
But you were not quite such.
I tried to be a clone
But it never felt quite right
Now I’ve broken free and stretched my wings
Forever finished with that test flight.
You assume it’s simply teenage angst
That the media controls my mind
You think I’m looking for myself
But it’s me you’ve got to find.
I know my purpose on this earth
My future is crystal clear
Yet my “radical” ideas
You simply refuse to hear.
I’ve grown up in a small-minded town
In a generation not so kind
But my morals have formed absolute
Ingrained in my mind.
You both were raised quite differently
And I must confess
I feel you’re pressing yourselves upon me
Hence, I’ve become a mess.
You say that you trust me
That you care for my happiness
But clearly by the way you chain me
You want only my success.
I try to show you what you’ve caused
I’ve slipped you subtle signs
But still these shackles slit my wrists;
Too tightly I am confined.
And so I’ve become a monster
It grows worse and worse each day
I fear you’ve caused my sanity
To eat itself away.
This is highly personal, written for my parents but never to reach their eyes. I thought I'd share it anyway.
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Wow... really, really good, and really, really deep. Beautiful poem, as always. I'm sorry about the way you feel with your parents... if that's the right wording... :p
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Thank you. And it's alright, I survive. I love my parents but they're my opposites and it's impossible for them to see eye to eye with me, which is extremely frustrating. They say they accept me and then they restrict me and attempt to conform me... but I'm not giving in. As Shakespeare said, "A coward dies many times before his death. The valiant never taste death but once." (:
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Wow. o.O Nadine, that was really really good. Very deep. Wow.
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Thank you. (: I don't think this is particularly deep, as I'm just simply stating the facts of my life, but I feel it was powerful.. at least to me.
Who votes I show this to my parents?
Who votes I show this to my parents?
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That was amazing... So deep, and definitely personal. I can relate to how you're feeling, but I'd never considered putting it to poem. And excellent rhyming. It really made sense...
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Thank you. I'm glad you can relate. And I hate the rhyming, but my brain automatically goes to rhyming poems..
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But what's great about this, is it wasn't one of those cheesy rhyming poems. The words complimented it, and it made complete sense, which takes even more skill than a free-verse poem, I think...
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It really did. The rhyming made it better.
I don't know if you should show it to your parents or not. Maybe you should. Maybe not.... Not sure.
I don't know if you should show it to your parents or not. Maybe you should. Maybe not.... Not sure.
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Yeah, it really does.
There's pros and cons to showing it to your parents... It really depends on if you think that you should, or shouldn't...
There's pros and cons to showing it to your parents... It really depends on if you think that you should, or shouldn't...
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You could show it to them and just not exactly explain it was meant for them.
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I'm not saying you even want to, but if you did want to show it to your parents, you could always just inconspicuously leave it on a table where they're bound to see it. But I personally don't share my poetry with my family...
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Yeah, neither do I..... But, I would agree with that.
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I would like them to read it but it's probably only going to cause a crying match. Not like we didn't have plenty of that already today, but I'd rather my eyes stayed relatively dry for the rest of the evening.
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Yeah, that'd be bad.
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Oh dear... What happened?
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What did happen?
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It's not that much of a rare occurrence, honestly. We fight daily. Today just happened to be particularly intense.
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That sucks... I'm not really able to fight with my parents, because Mom just walks away, and Dad will start screaming, and yelling, and I won't be able to hear myself think over my ears ringing for the rest of the night, so I just avoid the fights... I think it's the easiest route to take...
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With me, it's inevitable. They always have a problem with me. Obviously I can't do anything right, and must have far stricter rules than my brother who is two years younger than me. T.T
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Oh, I see. Well, in that case, I would inconspicuously slip them the poem, or leave it somewhere.
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