Broken
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Broken
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Pushed to the limit
Past my control
Dreading the break
Life at last takes its toll
Fading in, fading out
Getting lost in my dreams
Teary eyes are losing
Their once hopeful gleam
There's lead in my stomach
While the memories flood
My hands won't stop quivering
From the ice in my blood
You brought me to breaking
Knocked me down on my knees
Probably thinking
I'd manage with ease
I'm not invincible
Not even close
And you left me behind
When I needed you most
Never will come
The tears I beg to flow over
I need every wish
Each star, and each clover
"Loves me, loves me not"
Goes this gruesome game
Lost my will to play
And you are to blame
I see you with her
Inside I die yet again
My wish tonight:
Just please let it end
The endless pain
The tears in the night
When moments before
I sailed like a kite
I thought I could trust you
To keep me from harm
But my trust fell to pieces
While I broke in your arms
- Spoiler:
- This is probably the most depressing poem I've written, but, I thought it was relatively good, so... Here.
Pushed to the limit
Past my control
Dreading the break
Life at last takes its toll
Fading in, fading out
Getting lost in my dreams
Teary eyes are losing
Their once hopeful gleam
There's lead in my stomach
While the memories flood
My hands won't stop quivering
From the ice in my blood
You brought me to breaking
Knocked me down on my knees
Probably thinking
I'd manage with ease
I'm not invincible
Not even close
And you left me behind
When I needed you most
Never will come
The tears I beg to flow over
I need every wish
Each star, and each clover
"Loves me, loves me not"
Goes this gruesome game
Lost my will to play
And you are to blame
I see you with her
Inside I die yet again
My wish tonight:
Just please let it end
The endless pain
The tears in the night
When moments before
I sailed like a kite
I thought I could trust you
To keep me from harm
But my trust fell to pieces
While I broke in your arms
Tolly12bells- Rising Star 2
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Re: Broken
I already read that, but it's still o.O whoa. It's ridiculously good. o.O
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Re: Broken
Thanks... I'm proud of my rhyming...
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Your rhyming is crazy on that one.
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Thanks... One of the few times I've actually been proud of a rhyme scheme...
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It was really good.
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That was a sad poem but it was really well written.
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Thanks, Rachel.
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It was. *Agrees with Rachel*
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