The Shadow Wolf

I won't!

Okay, I'll be nice and update again. I don't want to keep you all in suspense too long. And I apologize for any spelling/grammar errors. Our computer where I have my actual draft saved is all screwy, and won't even turn on. Luckily, I have another copy saved, but this one isn't completely edited, so brace yourself. Possibly for missing words that cause a sentence not to make sense. xD

UPDATE: Alright, Chapter 4: Part 3 is up on post nine.

I spent an hour reading your story, and it was a well spent hour at that. Definitely excellent, however rushed it seemed to me; I felt a bit silly, having guessed Zachary was the culprit right before it was announced as so.
Well, I admit I highly anticipate the remainder of Oliver's escapades.

Thank you. I actually just finished writing it today. It's all finished, some 58 pages.

Nice, Lauren. If you made it a little longer, you could publish it! I'm here if you need an editor.

EDIT: AHHHH! Just read the new chapter!! Here I was thinking that Zachary was getting hurt by the wolf, when actually he was the wolf.. Is that the end, or is there more?

Cool. I can actually do a lot of self-editing, because I find all my mistakes when I reread, but I might come to you when I can't find any more of my own mistakes. xD

There is muchos muchos more. You're only about a third of the way through the story. It goes the whole school year, and you're only to a few weeks in.

Okay, xD

Awesome.

Yeah, I can't self edit.

It is awesome! I've read all of it! It's really good. I won't give anything away... It's so good!

Haha, I just found a part where it's like, "He looked to his laft." I think I meant left. xD I have about 300 little mistakes that need fixing.

I will admit, I think the very end could use a little clarification. I have to say, I didn't know quite what was going to happen, so I just kinda slingshotted (OMG, that's a word!) all my thoughts onto the paper. I have to go back through and rewrite a little bit of that, because it's kind of confusing. xD

Yeah, definitely.

Yeah, it is a little confusing! It just sort of abruptly ends.

I would always reread what I'd send to you, and I would never see the little mistakes, but then, like, a week later, I'd go back to write some more, and reread the last chapter to get back into the sense of what was happening, and I'd be like, "Crap. I forgot a word here, that's misspelled, I missed a period, .... what on Earth was I typing there?" xD

I wrote it so it ended abruptly, because I think the whole thing is sort of fast paced, and stops and starts really quickly, so I figured it should end quickly, but yes, it does need to be fixed up a little. Hahaha...

Yeah, I know.

Yeah, it needs to be fixed a bit.

I laugh at myself, because there'll be a word I want to use, but I can't think of it, so I'll put ____ and remind myself that I need to fill it in, then when I reread, I'll be like, "OHH! I know what word goes there!" xD I have a weird technique.

I know. I think I'll work on that now.

Smoooth.

Cool!

It makes me feel very smart. xD

I fixed (to be pronounced fix-ehd, like Romeo. BANISHED!) it. Or you could say I fixified it. But that sounds like mixified, and mixified makes me think of chocolate chip cookies, and school dances all at once. ... I'm very confused.

Okay, I'm feeling in an updaty mood, so I shall post the next part.

UPDATE: Alright, zer ve are. And I got to page two! Yayzzles!

This new chapter is very satisfying, of course, not unlike the previous four; although I found the dance demonstration scene to be embarrassing.

“Oh,” Oliver replied, turning his attention to his everything bagel he’d chosen out for his lunch today on his green tray.

Now, it isn't my intention to bore you of something you're sure to discover for yourself at another time; however, I desired to point out this slightly malformed sentence not only because it contains a blatant error, but I have found it particularly amusing for the sole fact it makes hardly any sense whatsoever.

Exactly. I actually intended it to be awkward. I do plan to edit that one a bit, though. (UPDATE: Okay, I fixed it, a little.)

Wait, you've never heard of an everything bagel? It's a bagel that has... Oh, what was it? ... More or less everything one might put on a bagel on it. So therefore, he looks down to his bagel. I was just describing which bagel. xD I realize how that might be confusing. I shall change it to a blueberry bagel. Hahaha...

Oops, my mistake then, sorry.

Or maybe even a banana bagel? That sounds quite nasty though. You did go on about banana muffins at some point . . . although I'm not too sure on the reasoning behind that statement.

No, it's not your mistake. It was intended to be an awkward moment, but it's good to get feedback. Thank you.

ROFL! Ahahaa, I don't think a banana bagel would taste very good. But "Banana muffins" is my excuse of a swear word. I don't particularly like cursing, so I will exclaim, "Holy banana muffins!" as to "Holy ****!" That's just me being an oddball.

It is curious indeed how we replace curse words with food items. I, for one, might exclaim "Shiitake mushrooms", (I may pronounce it incorrectly) as well as "Son of a Biscuit Eater"; opposed to the original counterparts which are deemed inappropriate for speaking aloud.

I believe food just seems so innocent, that putting it in the place of a naughty (I'm sorry, I use that word a lot too, because it's just fun to say. Especially in a British accent) word, makes it merely a funny substitute that still releases the anger we want, although, I may be completely off. I, personally, just enjoy the word banana, and the word muffin, and banana muffins themselves, so it's a very... well, no, it's not a normal thing to say, but... Okay, I give up. I can't explain this. It makes sense in my head, but try to put it on paper, and oh, no, my brain decides it doesn't feel like working. Son of a Biscuit Eater... I rather like that one. Ahaha.

On the other hand, I enjoy cookies, and cookie products; so it is quite the same for you as it is to me on the subject of Banana Muffins -- I say Son of a Biscuit Eater, and a biscuit of course, (excluding the breakfast kind) is the rip-off of said cookies. However, they are still cookies, so I love cookies, and cookie products? Now I am confusing myself even.

Pardon me, that made absolutely no sense at all; I see little reason to post it but here I post it nonetheless.

Actually, it made quite a lot of sense. I think we're drawn to the things we enjoy in life, which for you, are cookies, or biscuits, so, as to my Banana Muffins, are your cookies... Or... wait, no, mine didn't make sense either...

Ah well. I often find that randomness can actually lead to something rather genius. It's interesting to read...

I feel that I may come across as accusing; however, all I really wish to make clear is that I am only being honest. I've noticed well your style of writing seems to have evolved a bit more so like my own. I am not bothered by it in any way. If you like to use it that is perfectly alright with me; but might I ask why?